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Light Flashes In The Sky by ~kayleeface:iconkayleeface:



Electric, the sky shines for a second.
Blink and it's gone.
The jagged spikes of unleashed nature.
How powerless we are to control what we can't understand.
Minutes pass,
The sky again explodes and illuminates the dark void of question.
So much power turned into beauty,
The beauty of a world gone mad.
There are some things that we will never be able to tame,
No matter how hard we try,
And those are the most beautiful.
Watch the light flashes in the sky,
Dancing to a melodic lullaby.
©2006-2009 ~kayleeface
:iconkayleeface:

Author's Comments

This is based on a wonderful night spent in the garage of my best friend, dancing in the rain and watching the lightning. I have never been so awestruck as I was that night when I watched it jump across the sky, and even after the rain, the lightning danced on, as if it didn't want to dissapoint me by taking away it's beauty. I will remember this night for the rest of my life, it was the night I truly began to appreciate nature.

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:iconhissy-fit:
Mm.. I love lightning, so magical and bright ^_^
I'm already a fan of your work.
The only thing I'd suggest is perhaps a change in this:
"The sky again explodes and illuminates the dark void of sky."
What distracted me from the flow of the poem was the use of sky twice.. perhaps rewording it or choosing a different word?
I can't write poetry for my life, it's just a suggestion :)

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...*wave* o___o;
:iconkayleeface:
Thank you very much. i noticed that and was going to change the sky part, but I must have forgotten. thanks for commenting and I appreciate your critique

kaylee

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Theres no sensation to compare with this
Suspended animation, a state of bliss
Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies
Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit
:icongymnastics-chick:
nice job.. :cookie:

i love it :+fav:

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:floating: Peace starts with a smile :floating:
:iconkayleeface:
really? it was a fun night that led to amny ideas

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Theres no sensation to compare with this
Suspended animation, a state of bliss
Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies
Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit
:icongymnastics-chick:
:giggle:

cool

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:floating: Peace starts with a smile :floating:
:iconloverrbugg:
Diggin this one.

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::cant be close enough;;unless I'm feeling your heartbeat::
:iconkayleeface:
wow thanks a lot, its one of my favorite pieces i have written because it was kinda in the moment "i need a pen and somethign to write on" type of thing

means a lot though
thanks

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Theres no sensation to compare with this
Suspended animation, a state of bliss
Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies
Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit
:iconcharrm:
Aw, that was so my garage.

We so have to do that again sometime, and I'll use my magical powers to bring back the lightning.

We'll invite Calvin and Hannah again, too.
:iconkayleeface:
And that other girl that was there. I miss those days, the good old days of innocence and youth, now things have been so different, I'm hoping to get over to see you soon. Call me love.

Kaylee

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Theres no sensation to compare with this
Suspended animation, a state of bliss
Cant keep my eyes from the circling skies
Tongue-tied and twisted just an earth-bound misfit

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